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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? #country #language

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As we all know, living in a foreign
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 and dealing with new people is not plain sailing. Surviving in a place where a different
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 is spoken will not be easy even if you are fluent in that
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. So, I agree that one has to face
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many social
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as well as
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 practical
problems
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. In
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 essay, I will dig into some of the issues why it is not that simple to live in a foreign
country
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. The very first thing one has to encounter is the
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 barrier. The different dialects will surely make you have trouble.
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, even buying things from a store will not be easy if you do not understand their accent. Another problem comes from communication with the local dwellers.
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, the local people invite you to a party but you cannot make new friends because of the
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 barrier
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 the others are having fun.
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, you will not get a chance to have conversations with your neighbours. Since you live in a new place you need to widen your social circle so you must be fluent in the
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 of the
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 that he intends to move to.
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, coping with new cultures is another challenging thing. Every
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 has different religions and manners so we need to struggle a lot to fit in. If we cannot communicate, we will not get the opportunity to learn about their cultures and we will not settle in their community. The consequences of
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 are loneliness
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 no friends and low socializing.
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, when I travelled to Spain for business even though it was just a week, I felt so alone because I had no one to speak to or hang out with. I cannot imagine myself living there for extra weeks without even knowing a word. These are the detrimental effects of living in a
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 where you have to speak a foreign
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. Taking everything into consideration,
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 we can not deny that there are so many
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 in migrating to a different
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, we can solve these
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 with the help of
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.
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, as time goes by we will be used to these
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.
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Language use
Instead of using phrases such as 'we all know', try to substantiate your points with concrete evidences or facts.
Content development
You could have expanded more on the practical problems aspect. You focused more on social problems and brushed lightly on practical issues.
grammar
Be cautious with your subject pronouns ('you', 'we', 'he'). Make sure they're consistent and clear to whom they refer.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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