Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend?

There is a view that
life
is a scene of contestation that has been stated individual must be a winner or be a loser ,so,It will create a space of high tension for people that they need to gain a victory for considering a successful person ,
in addition
,they opine
this
belief is essential for motivate society to reach better results ,but others argue with
this
idea and allege
this
approach is harmful to human-living because It is a source of schism and has distracted the relationship in a public and the sense of team-working will vanish,
similarly
,I agree with the latter statement ,
furthermore
,there are many facets that are rejecting the previous view,
finally
, I am going to explore
this
statement to find both pros and cons of competition is a potential factor as a creator or a destructive for human.
First
of all, looking at
life
as a great game for each person is in their hands,
however
, I'm afraid I have to disagree with it because the self-esteem of humans has dropped by the constant comparison with another person,
such
as in a classroom when the teacher has considered students are on the latter of scoring many negative behaviours
such
as jealousy, losing the sense of cooperation and engaging in a group as a member who wants to progress a team for reaching their goals will be broken, all of above are confirmed by many research studies in the environment of academies, workplaces.
Second
,
accordingly
to a scientific study that has been conducted by many nations around the world scientists have demonstrated winning in challengeable situations
such
as accepting the exam or getting a position in a career has not guaranteed happiness among these people, while others have been tried to grow in their
life
by the sense of cooperation and avoiding from the win or fail
as a result
of their efforts have gained better achievements and prosperity. In the end, the ideology of win and fail as a way to progressing in the same position in society will growing jealousy, broken communication, and losing the real meaning of
life
in our society, so policy maker in specifically in academic situations must provide the environments that have constructed on the cooperation
instead
of competition for their nations.
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