Working patterns have changed a lot. Now many people work online from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of working.

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It is well

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that technology progression,

changes

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lifestyle

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and job

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. After the introduction and expansion of the

internet

, job patterns have changed significantly. Nowadays, many

people

work online from their homes. These

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work patterns have revolutionized some carriers in a

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positive

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positive

way,

besides

its drawbacks to some other jobs. In

this

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I will discuss

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and cons of online jobs and give my point of view.

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hand,

internet

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has

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brought

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comfort and ease to

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lives.

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, these days many purchases are done online.

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means less

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communication

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communication

, less traffic and more

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. As many classes are held online,

this

has solved the problem of distance between teachers and students and

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is precious for

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of general education and for

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culture.

In addition

, many

people

can run their own business with a very small amount of money,

hence

, unemployment decreases in these fields.

on the other

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we can consider

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of online carriers. To illustrate,

market

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is not only a place to buy goods. it is

also

a place for

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interaction and

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, lessens

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anxiety and loneliness.

Virtual

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world has made many

people

lonelier than before and some are nearly detached from

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world.

Furthermore

, many crimes can take place via online shopping.

For instance

people

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receive

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receive

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alert

messages from

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, not to trust all these internet_based shops.

Moreover

, many

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businesses

buisnesses

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businesses

that could not cope with new

changes

are closed

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. to give an example, some traditional sellers that are not interested in

internet

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, can not

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modern

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businesses

buisnesses

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businesses

and have to end their

carriers

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. In conclusion, alteration of job patterns after the development of

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was inevitable and

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changed

the

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social interactions

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magnificently

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significantly

. I believe these

changes

will continue and in spite of their negative effects, their

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benefits

benifits

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benefits

overweigh their disadvantages. There is no chance

for

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inhibiting

technology

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changes

. All we can do is

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cope with them. Government and

people

should take some actions to reduce the harms of online jobs like any other harms of new technologies.

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