Working patterns have changed a lot. Now many people work online from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of working.

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acknowledged
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that technology progression,
changes
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lifestyle
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and job
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. After the introduction and expansion of the
internet
, job patterns have changed significantly. Nowadays, many
people
work online from their homes. These
changes
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work patterns have revolutionized some carriers in a
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positive
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positive
way,
besides
its drawbacks to some other jobs. In
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I will discuss
pros
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the pros
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and cons of online jobs and give my point of view.
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one
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hand,
internet
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has
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brought
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brought
comfort and ease to
communities
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lives.
For instance
, these days many purchases are done online.
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communication
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communication
, less traffic and more
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. As many classes are held online,
this
has solved the problem of distance between teachers and students and
this
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of general education and for
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culture.
In addition
, many
people
can run their own business with a very small amount of money,
hence
, unemployment decreases in these fields.
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we can consider
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of online carriers. To illustrate,
market
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is not only a place to buy goods. it is
also
a place for
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face to face
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interaction and
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, lessens
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anxiety and loneliness.
Virtual
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world has made many
people
lonelier than before and some are nearly detached from
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world.
Furthermore
, many crimes can take place via online shopping.
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,
people
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receive
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receive
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alert
messages from
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, not to trust all these internet_based shops.
Moreover
, many
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businesses
buisnesses
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businesses
that could not cope with new
changes
are closed
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. to give an example, some traditional sellers that are not interested in
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, can not
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modern
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businesses
buisnesses
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businesses
and have to end their
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. In conclusion, alteration of job patterns after the development of
internet
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,
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was inevitable and
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changed
the
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social interactions
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magnificently
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significantly
. I believe these
changes
will continue and in spite of their negative effects, their
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
overweigh their disadvantages. There is no chance
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inhibiting
technology
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changes
. All we can do is
to
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cope with them. Government and
people
should take some actions to reduce the harms of online jobs like any other harms of new technologies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Flexibility
  • Work-life balance
  • Commuting
  • Productivity
  • Personalized
  • Geographical constraints
  • Isolation
  • Overwork
  • Discipline
  • Dependency
  • Technical issues
  • Collaboration
  • Communication
  • Security issues
  • Sensitive information
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