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Should parents obliged to immunise their children against common childhood diseases? Or do individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? What is your view of this practice?

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With the advancement in science and medicine, our healthcare practitioners are able to protect
children
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 some deadly viruses and diseases, thankfully. Surprisingly, some feel it should be the parents' choice to get their
child
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 immunised or not. I wholeheartedly disagree with
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, in
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 essay, I will explain why I feel it is absolutely necessary to get every
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 vaccinated, and what could be the consequences of not doing so. Above all, we should be thankful to our scientists for developing
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medicines and vaccines that can help treat or prevent common childhood diseases. As the vaccines are believed to be 90% effective against deadly viruses, it is essential for every infant or youngster to get a dose at
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 mentioned age. Pulse Polio,
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, is a scheme run by Rotary Health Club worldwide to eradicate polio from our society but it defeats
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 purpose if even a single
child
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 misses out and gets infected. It is well established that Polio can have some drastic effects on an infected
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's body. It is,
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, in my opinion, extremely important for parents to get their
offsprings
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 immunised. There is, apparently, one more reason which contributes to the idea of
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 vaccination. Some believe that a vaccine can have long-lasting side effects but
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 thought has no truth to it. People should
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 assured that the vaccines developed are well tested before they are brought to market and pose no threat to their
children
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. In fact, Chicken Pox,
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, is a highly communicable virus that can infect vaccinated
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 as well if they are exposed to an infected one for
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 long time, so it is a matter of an individual's duty towards society as well. It would not be fair to risk others' life because of some parents' carelessness. While
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 is trying to alleviate
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hazardous diseases, we can not afford to not abide by the basic healthcare rules and regulations. In conclusion,
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 some have preconceived notions in their minds pertaining to the side effects of the
immunisers
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, there is no research that can prove it.
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, in my view,
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 should enforce strict rules regarding the immunisation of
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 at the right age.
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