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Some people believe that humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit, while others argue that the rights of animals should be protected. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The idea of animal rights has long been contentious among many people. Some may consider the use of cattle for human benefits as something positive. While others may oppose the idea and perceive it as exploitation and ask for animal rights. In
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 essay, both sides will be discussed and expressing my own opinion. The human being is recognised as superior and valuable to any other species ,
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, other beings must be utilised to benefit humanity.
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, the flesh of cattle has numerous advantages. Out of these voluminous , one of them is providing protein to the body which is essential for growth. Not just the merit of flesh , but
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 many cattle are used for experiment purposes which contribute massively to the diagnosis and treatment of numerous diseases.
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, a new medication will be tested on mice to
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 the research before it gets promoted to be tested on human beings.
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, all the above prerequisites would be identified as an excuse to persistently practice exploitation.
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, the slaughtering of
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 in an inhumane way in the name of compensation packages would undermine the animal’s feelings and sensations.
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 to the inhumane way of slaughtering,
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subsequently
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 the maltreatment of
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 including during slaughtering may give rise to the extinction of
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, which is detrimental to the human race. In my opinion, taking both sides into account, it is compelling to implement animal rights with some flexibility. Humans should be allowed to benefit from
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 but must be alarmed about exploitation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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