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Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today.

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In recent years,
music
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 transformed everyone in different formats.While certain
people
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 belives ,it is just a form of relaxation .
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, others feel it has a greater impact on the community.In my opinion,society gains a lot of benefits through its theme. Most
people
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 use
songs
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 for Self-Human relaxation.As
people
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,we tend to hear
music
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 to avoid stress or to reduce work pressure.
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,my cousin use to hear melody
songs
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 at work to decrease pressure.
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,
music
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 was most commonly used in the party to create joyful moments.
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 is due to the variety of themes in it.we had a family get-together
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 week and played folk
songs
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 to have an energetic environment. Some
people
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 use to argue that
music
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 plays a vital role in community goodness as well as its reformation.There are many
people
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 in society who used to consider messages from
songs
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 as a major lesson in their
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.
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, my grandfather teaches me
life
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 ethics lessons by hearing old
songs
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 and explaining to me,how can we implement them in our
life
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.
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,
people
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 who had been convicted of a crime.During the sentence period ,they listen to the
songs
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 from great legends which contain important messages for the reformation as well as help them to initiate a new
life
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 . To conclude,
music
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 could be used in any aspect.But it fully depends on
people
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's perspectives.
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,most
people
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 believe it is an art and would be useful to transform society in a healthier way.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Escapism
  • 2. Social gatherings
  • 3. Cultural heritage
  • 4. Traditions
  • 5. Social change
  • 6. Political expression
  • 7. Awareness
  • 8. Community
  • 9. Belonging
  • 10. Therapeutic benefits
  • 11. Mental health
  • 12. Emotional expression
  • 13. Cognitive performance
  • 14. Concentration
  • 15. Memory
  • 16. Productivity
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