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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human beings in
this
 century live an excellent quality of
life
 in
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 to the past centuries.
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 essay intends to compare both the eras and in my
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opinion
opionion
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opinion
 living standards
has
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 improved recently,
this
 will be explained in the following paragraph with an example. Let's begin with an old adage, need is the mother of an invention.
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 means
,
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people
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that people
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 in
old
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the old
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 centuries
where
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 surviving on whatever they had,
however
,
this
 was not enough for them to survive in
day to day
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life
 with no proper
housings
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,
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transportation
transportations
transporations
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transportation
, and
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technology
techonolgy
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technology
. Mostly,
people
 were spending
tremendous
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 amount of time doing
labourous
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laborious
task
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 without proper machines.
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, as there were no
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technology
techology
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technology
, previously, farmer together with their families were digging the land manually for several
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 in the hope of water.
Furthermore
, some
of
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the
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historians
has
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wrote
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 that pupils
where
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 walking several miles for
schoolings
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schooling
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 due to the lack of proper
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transportation
transporation
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transportation
 and roads. In the recent era,
transportations
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transportation
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 and technologies
has
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 made
people
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life
 convenient.
Firstly
,
people
 can commute easily from one place to another with the use of great
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infrastructure
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
 and connecting multiple cities.
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, with the use of
the
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technology person could finish the work efficiently in
shorter
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 time. To add to
this
,
techologies
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technologies
 like
internet
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 has
bring
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the
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communities closer
with
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frequently and with
easy
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 way of communication.
In a
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 recent survey found that more than 80 per cent population around the globe has proper housing and living
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 better
life
 with the use of
the
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technology that includes airways,
internet
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the internet
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, mobile phones and medical
equipments
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equipment
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. To conclude, it's true
the
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 human beings are living
better
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a better
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life
 than folks from the 18th or 19th centuries. As mentioned above, I agree
the
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that
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 technology has bought
the
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 great difference in improving the living standard by making the daily
life
 of
people
 easy and convenient.
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