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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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Our world has become profoundly affected by unprecedented technological and globalization advancements, which have transformed the way we live and make decisions, both little and large. We have an enormous variety of
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 to choose from.
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, some people argue that we don’t have the liberty of making multiple
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. In my opinion, with developing technology and resources, our freedom of choice has greatly enhanced. In the following paragraphs, I shall elaborate on my viewpoint. Primarily, we can now access reliable information on the internet at any moment, thanks to technological advancements. We have quick access to an incredible amount of materials online, and
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 freedom allows us to make educated decisions at every stage of our lives. When purchasing online, people are now confronted with a large array of
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. Unlike conventional storefronts, e-commerce platforms like Amazon and eBay do not have space limits.
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, when a customer searches for a product on these sites, hundreds or thousands of similar goods emerge.
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, other technical improvements have made it easier to grow more foods, prepare new cuisines, preserve them, and alleviate the world’s hunger problem. Take the example of toothpaste. In the past, you just chose your
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 toothpaste brand and size.
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, now, each brand offers a huge number of
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 and a variety of benefits. You can decide whether you want your toothpaste to whiten your teeth, strengthen them, make your gums healthier or freshen your breath.
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,
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 multitude of
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 creates a lot of confusion when it comes to deciding which brand to buy our clothing and fashion items from or restaurant delicacies to try.
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, we have a variety of employment alternatives to choose from, but our
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 are limited when we choose to work in our hometown or establish a business. To sum up, we are fortunate to have so many
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 in our contemporary period. Though we might not have as many
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 at present, technological advancement is always expanding the list and presenting us with an abundance of
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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