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You are due to start new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employeer. In your letter: •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell him or her when you think you can start.

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Dear Mr. Thommes, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you that, unfortunately, I will not be able to meet the deadline of starting work next week as planned
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 an unexpected medical issue. A couple of weeks ago, I was involved in a road accident
while
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 returning from my vacation. After consulting my family doctor, I was diagnosed with a minor fracture in my left leg.
Although
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 my condition is improving, my doctor has advised me to avoid travelling and to continue physiotherapy for another week to ensure a full recovery. I
also
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 have a follow-up appointment next week, during which another X-ray will be taken to assess my progress. I sincerely apologise for any inconvenience
this
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 may cause. I am very excited about joining your company and contributing my skills and experience to the team. If my recovery continues as expected, I should be able to work on July 15. I will keep you posted after my medical appointment and immediately inform you if there are any changes to my expected start date. Thank you for your understanding and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you and hope to join the team very soon. Yours faithfully, Taylor

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts of the task. To make it even better, you can add one short line to ask if there is anything you should do before you start.
task response
Task response: Your reason is clear and easy to understand. Keep the time for your new start very clear, like 'I can start on 15 July'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow from start to end. Keep one main idea in each part, as you did here.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You used linking words well. You can also use one simple link like 'because' or 'so' to keep the flow very natural.
task response
Task response: You clearly explained your situation, your problem, and when you may start. This fully answers the task.
task response
Task response: The tone is polite and right for a letter to a new employer.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, so it is easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each part has one main point, and the ideas go in a good order.
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