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Some people believe that a person’s culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 argue that a person's
culture
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 is built by
one
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's nationality, whereas others think it only affects slightly. It is a common belief that the global social network makes a diverse
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.
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, it is definitely more evident that national originality forms
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's
culture
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 due to
parents
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 On the
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 hand,
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 network is easily accessible worldwide.
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 lets
people
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 enjoy other countries'
cultures
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 through
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social networks.
People
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 can be informed about how
people
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 in another country live, what kinds of food they like and what kinds of entertainment are popular in their country. From these,
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 can easily be exposed to other
cultures
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;
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, they naturally have various cultural perspectives.
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, Youtube enables
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 to know the recent trends in other nations from popular videos uploaded by influencers.
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,
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's
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 is inevitably decided by
parents
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 who already have a national fundamental
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. It is clear that younger children are easily affected to construct their perspective by surroundings
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 as their
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. Regards, when he or she is extremely young, they experience their
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' cultural preferences as
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 always try to teach what they learned from their ancestors.
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,
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 they meet other countries'
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 after they grow up, national originality will have already been given to children.
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, a survey of what kinds of food Koreans like from the South Korean cultural department reveals that most of them still prefer to have Korean house meals which they had with their
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 when they were younger rather than western food. In conclusion, social network shows many other
cultures
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, and
people
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 might be culturally influenced by them.
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, it is definitely true that their national originality provides
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's
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 due to their
parents
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' teaching.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural norms
  • Values
  • Traditions
  • Practices
  • Festivities
  • Cuisine
  • Language
  • Religion
  • Beliefs
  • Social systems
  • Institutions
  • Globalization
  • Media influence
  • Multicultural societies
  • Migration
  • Personal choices
  • Experiences
  • Education
  • Knowledge exchange
  • Economic factors
  • Homogenized
  • Cultural identity
  • Geographically concentrated
  • Individualism
  • Collectivism
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