Some people think that technology makes life complex, so we should make our life simpler without using technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, some people think that
technology
is complicating our lives. They
also
think we should lead a basic lifestyle with no
technology
. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view. For a variety of reasons,
firstly
, the advancement in
technology
makes our work easier. When we need a meeting to coordinate the work, we just need to sit in a place and join a meeting room online.
This
helps us save time to move.
Secondly
, modern
technology
helps us communicate with everyone in the world. Take Facebook as an example, we can talk with our families and friends who are distant apart from us with a video sharing option.
Thirdly
, innovations in
aviation
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sector
has
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made our travel time much shorter and more relaxed
Furthermore
, new
technology
makes our
life
enjoyable. The more
technology
develops, the more software appears.
This
means that people can watch videos, stories or play games
instead
of watching television.
Moreover
,
technology
also
helps the medical industry thrive. Recently, patients can be advised by
the
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doctors through medical applications or ask doctors some questions through
an
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email.
Besides
, the health sector has been able to cure cancer,
polio
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based on
high-
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high technology
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technology
. Thanks to
technology
, our
life
has become more comfortable. In conclusion, despite
technology
has
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made our
life
complex,
this
essay can explain the benefits of
technology
. I personally disagree with
this
view if
this
life
has absolutely no
technology
.
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