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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays we live in a modern era, where we are surrounded by new technologies and these are changed our way of living, especially as it is widely seen in kids. These technologies impact
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's minds with both positive and negative influences.
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 with, the advantages of using technologies, it might be said the internet is full information format wide and a wide range of sources. It is in itself useful for those who are able to discriminate between sources and sift information.
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 can develop their academic achievement through free online courses or by watching essential things.
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, it can improve their autonomous learning rather than rote learning. What I mean by
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, is they may not only connect with all of r the world but
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 explore the world.
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 , parents should control their
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 by trying to act as role models and establish the ground rules and conventions. We can see that nowadays's
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 are adopting a sedentary lifestyle by playing video games or spending all of their
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 in front of the Tv.
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 in itself can cause some problems related to health, like obesity or visual diseases. If parents spend the
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 as the
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 they should and put them under some limireducings,
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 allows reducing the risk of
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 falling sedentary lifestyle.
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,
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 spend much
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 with their parents and friends due to the Internet and they are becoming impolite and destroying the relationships between them. In conclusion, it appears that using technology has both pros and cons. I strongly believe that the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages, if
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 absorb patterns of using the Internet in a safe way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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