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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss Both views and give your own opinion

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #mankind #universe
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People have different views about
exploration
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the exploration
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outer
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of outer
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space
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. While there are persuasive arguments in
favor
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 of the idea that it would be a waste of
resources
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, I would argue that it is
a
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apply
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fundamental
of
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importance for
human
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a human
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 being to increase their knowledge about
space
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.
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with
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 some people believe that countries should not waste their money and
resources
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 on exploring the universe beyond our
planet
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. From their point of view, governments spend annually a large amount of money on building required
equip
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equipment
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 for
space
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 exploration
such
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spacecraft's
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spacecraft
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,
space
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 shuttles, rockets, International
space
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 stations and unmanned
robatic
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robotic
 probs, while
gain
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gaining
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 knowledge of
these kind
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this kind
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 of researches would not have a significant on
terestrrial
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terrestrial
 creatures.
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,
human
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a human
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 can spend their time, energy and
resources
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 on boosting the quality of life on
Earth
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Earth's
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planet
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instead
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 of
waste
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wasting
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 them on fruitless
researches
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research
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. In spite of that, there are those, including myself, who subscribe view that exploring the world
off
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 our
planet
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’s atmosphere is very crucial. They argue that
the
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science will not advance unless we dedicate time and effort to
know
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knowing
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 more about it.
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,
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extension
Extention
extention
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the extention
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 of science in all fields would
finally
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 benefit us. In
this
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case
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 by researching
about
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outer
space
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 we will attain valuable information
such
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 as the feature of our
planet
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’s orbit to launch a satellite into it for
transmition
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transmission
 data or gaining information about
movement
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the movement
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 of meteors or other heavy solid bodies which may hit Earth. In my opinion, researching
space
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 is important because we may find a clue
of
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about
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 life in other parts of the solar system or even other
galexies
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galaxies
. Due to excessive extraction of natural
resources
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, we may face
depletion
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the depletion
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 of these precious
resources
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 in future on our
planet
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 which can threaten our ecosystem and life.
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, finding a new
planet
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where
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that
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 is inhabitable can be
a good news
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good news
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. In conclusion, both ideas
exploring
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of exploring
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 outer
space
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 can be acceptable under certain circumstances, having said
tha
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that
 I personally think that
this
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 is essential to be done since not
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only
all
onl
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only
 can expand our science in
this
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 field but
also
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 may help us to find a new
planet
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 for habitation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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