It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people say that the extinction of wild

animals

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is a natural process, so people should not try to prevent

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from happening. In my experience, I am totally against the statement. There are two major reasons why the extinction of wild

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is not a completely natural process. One main reason is that nowadays people hunt many endangered

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for economic purposes.

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individuals

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sell animal teeth, horns, or fur to get money, others like to consume wild animal meat.

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, these activities lead to the disappearance of many

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. Another important reason is that because of the increasing agricultural land, a lot of natural areas have been demolished leading to the reduction of animal habitats. In my country, the forest area reduced by 20% between 1999 and 2019. Because of these above reasons, governments and

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should take numerous steps immediately to prevent them. The

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solution would be to approve more laws which aim to reduce the deforestation process and eliminate hunting activities. In recent years, governments have approved more environmental laws

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as imprisoning

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who hunted rare

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and punishing

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who deforest illegally.

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, the

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solution would be to improve agricultural science which not only can help us to increase the quantity and quality of land farm production, but

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help us raise endangered

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in zoos. In conclusion, many animal species become extinct or endangered because of human-related reasons.

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, governments and

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need to try many solutions to prevent them.

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Topic Vocabulary:

species extinction
biodiversity
conservation
ecosystems
environmental ethics
habitat destruction
anthropogenic impact
ecological balance
natural selection
wildlife preservation
genetic diversity
endangered species
biological heritage
sustainable practices
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