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In some countries, secondary schools provide students with an opportunity to learn skills such as cooking, basic repairs, drawing and woodwork. What are the advantages and disadvantages of teaching such non-academic classes in school?

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It is a controversial issue about secondary education whether teaching non-cognitive
skills
 are essential or not for
students
. In my point of view of
this
 issue, it has merits and demerits. One advantage of acquiring practical techniques is often useful in case of emergency. Especially, in terms of a big-scale earthquake
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 occur, people are forced to live by themselves not relying on top-notch home appliances and technologies. In Japan, during Kobe Earthquake which occurred in 1995, over ten thousand people kept evacuating from their houses and living in a shelter for several weeks. In
such
 inconvenient life situations, cooking, repairing and DIY which
students
 used to learn in their secondary school would be helpful
However
, one of the main disadvantages of teaching practical
skills
 in schools is affected on a shortage of labour force in the educational field.
Teachers
 have to be familiar with these
skills
in addition
 to major academic subjects. According to an international investigation, it reports that some
teachers
 overwork more than 100 hours in 1month caused their amount of work is too much, teaching classes, attending faculty meetings, and checking out each student’s homework. From thinking about the recent hard work, it does not make sense for
teachers
 to prepare for the extra classes. In conclusion, learning about daily life
skills
 through a class has positive and negative effects, but the importance of learning these
skills
 would outweigh the disadvantages because of the development of the perception of reality in children. To reduce a teacher’s workload, it needs to collaborate with local communities and companies as an instructor
instead
 of educational institutions. Creating new educational opportunities for
students
 would broaden
students
' knowledge and
also
 improve
teachers
' work-life balance.
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