Some people believe the purpose of education is to make people useful to society. Others believe it is to prepare them to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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their dreams and achieve success. In
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would explain both points and give my personal opinion
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in upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand , folks believe that
education
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many benefits to countries and it
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of
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and growth of
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economy
.
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citizens think that
people
who got
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in
field
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such
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, nurses and
sciencetist
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scientists
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all they very helpful not only for
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countries
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growth but
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in
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field for only service
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for money
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they help
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needy
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On the other hand
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of
study
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would be
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fulfil
their own ambitions
in addition
, many students learn many subjects
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because
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because
they liked not for any other.
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, nowadays migrations of students increased
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because
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because
all students
proirity
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toward
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their
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their
dreams .
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,
people
try to
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achieve
avhieve
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achieve
more success in their fields
therefore
they get higher
education
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education
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part of
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development as well
persons
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own growth is
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on
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where they can see
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in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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