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These days, violence among young people is becoming increasingly widespread. What are causes for this tendency? What solutions can be made to overcome it?

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society
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 where almost everything is changing fast, the young generation is turning to a short temper. They easily get angry than the previous generation who has less developed technology and they sometimes express their emotions in aggressive ways.
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 tendency is getting higher, as time goes by. I believe that current circumstances which are made by high developing technology affect the phenomenon and it can be alleviated by a specific method. I think cutting-edge technology contributes to the personality of young
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, in modern
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, most
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 use electronic devices
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 as smartphones or computers. Before the advent of the internet,
people
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 would use paper which takes much more time to get information, so,
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 they're supposed to learn a method to wait so that they have a solid and calm temper. But now we can easily attain a lot of information from the internet immediately, so we don't need to wait, and
people
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 aren't able to attain habits to wait and
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 they can't control themselves.
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, it is not an inevitable problem because we have a chance to change our behaviour by intentionally practising endurance. I want to say that reading paper books is helpful since we should wait to get a core message until the end of the reading.
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, we
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 could learn emotions which come from other
people
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 through reading books. For
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 reason, I believe that reading an entire book is an effective way to lose a short temper. In conclusion, modern
society
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 changes make the young have violent tendencies, but I believe it can change by reading a book. So the future of our
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 is positive.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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