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Some people say that university education is the best way to achieve success in life, while others believe it is no longer true. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary epoch, whilst proponents discern that academic credentials have a crucial impact on everyone`s career progress, opponents have a diverse view.
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, I believe that having graduate and
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qualification
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 has become a mainstay in the current era when science dominates the world. My contention will be
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 explained. On the one hand, most
people
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 believed that acquiring experience or doing something you like can help you become successful rather than having academic degrees. To illustrate, when some
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 learn some skills and develop their talents, they can
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 their goals.
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, in Egypt, many popular celebrities have only
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 school education.
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, they have exerted an endless effort to pursue their ambitions.
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, they gain wealth and fame.
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, it is assumed to achieve
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success if everyone focuses on
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real-world experience rather than university qualifications.
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, other
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 think that faculty enrollment is highly necessary in order to prepare them for the challenging market and the dynamic world.
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, if learners
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 in a university, they gain some skills and wisdom
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 as communication and management skills, and theoretical knowledge.
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, they may have more opportunities to be hired in better job positions.
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, many international companies put
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academic degrees as prerequisites for hiring.
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, what can be said is that higher-academies education can create a pathway to an outstanding life. In conclusion, after
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 essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, it can be reiterated that
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 most
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 think that institute education is aimless, others consider it
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a paramount necessity. From my perspective, university degrees can direct professionals
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 the right track to lead
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 practical life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achievement
  • acquisition
  • advancement
  • aspiring
  • credentials
  • credentials
  • employment
  • entrepreneurship
  • graduate
  • institutions
  • invest
  • knowledge
  • opportunities
  • pathways
  • perspective
  • networking
  • potential
  • prosperity
  • self-education
  • skills
  • success
  • tuition fees
  • university education
  • valuable
  • vocational
  • worldly knowledge
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