Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people,s private life while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

It is often believed that the
media
has the authority to publish private
information
about
people
.
However
, some
people
have a negative view of
this
, arguing it should be restricted. I partially agree with the latter, for it can violate privacy, making it harder for
people
to have a peaceful life regardless of the importance of
media
to expose detailed private
information
, to tell the truth. On the one hand, the
media
should have a right to reveal private
information
to promote the understanding of the public.
In other words
, the exact location and background of a person should be made accessible so
people
have a clearer sense of a situation to make better decisions.
For instance
, an article on the family background of a notorious Japanese politician called Saito, who is spoiled by his wealthy relatives, has made it easier for many
people
to understand his rude and self-centred acts that cause a number of troubles to others.
Consequently
,
this
allows
people
to understand the very root of problems to make a fair evaluation of the suitability of the person working as a mayor.
On the other hand
,
media
should be controlled when it exposes private
information
to the public because it draws excessive attention, preventing
people
from having an ordinary life. Indeed, it often causes serious troubles not only for a person but
also
for his or her relatives and even neighbours when details of personal life are published by the
media
. To illustrate
this
, parents were forced to stay at home when their son was arrested for drink and driving which killed three lives in Japan in 2018
due to
the crowds of reporters and strangers with curiosity visiting their place. In spite of them being innocent themselves, they still live under unknown threats, suffering from intense pressure since their privacy is not sufficiently protected. In conclusion, I somewhat agree that the right of
media
should be restricted so as not to harm the lives of innocent
people
.
Nevertheless
, it is often expected to reveal the private lives of important
people
including politicians to encourage the public to make fair decisions.
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