Top athletes and famous musicians today are paid enormous sums of money, and many people believe that this is unfair and that athletes and musicians should not be paid so much. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days, well know
sport
players and Change the noun form
sports
musicians
get paid huge amounts of money for their work, whereas others athletes
and musicians
with the same or better skills do not get any recognition. In this
essay
I will explain from an economic and social point of view why I think that Add a comma
,essay
this
is unfair.
On the one hand, some top athletes
get paid millions of dollars while other Correct your spelling
athletes
atheletes
from the same team or category are not being paid enough; Correct your spelling
athletes
as a result
, those who are not paid enough have to face some difficulties related to their economy. For example
, Football players from first
categories that are not getting paid as much as the ones that became famous have to afford from their own savings all the costs related to physiotherapy, nutritionists, personal trainers and sometimes Correct article usage
the first
traveling
to events; while famous Football players do not have to deal with Change the spelling
travelling
this
costs. This
situation remarks how unfair the sports world is, and how important it will be to start recognising all professional athletes
, so they can succeed in their career
.
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
On the other hand
, famous musicians
earn lots of money doing shows, releasing new albums or videoclips
and advertising their careers Correct your spelling
video clips
in
social media; Change preposition
on
on the contrary
, the majority of musicians
do not get paid and are not recognised for their performances, because a big part of the society believes that they do it as a hobby. For instance
, not-famous musicians
are not able to develop their career and generate a salary from it; usually, they do not have any support from music studios, and they cannot advertise their work. In this
case, the government should change the laws regarding to
music and arts, and make sure that everybody has the same opportunities and wages.
In conclusion, all Remove the preposition
apply
athletes
and musicians
should be respected for what they do, because at
the end it is their job and that needs to be paid like every other career. I think that Change preposition
in
the
politicians should regulate their payments, so everybody can have an opportunity to Correct article usage
apply
Correct your spelling
succeed
suceed
.Correct your spelling
succeed
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