Top athletes and famous musicians today are paid enormous sums of money, and many people believe that this is unfair and that athletes and musicians should not be paid so much. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, well know
sport
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players and
musicians
get paid huge amounts of money for their work, whereas others
athletes
and
musicians
with the same or better skills do not get any recognition. In
this
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I will explain from an economic and social point of view why I think that
this
is unfair. On the one hand, some top
athletes
get paid millions of dollars while other
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athletes
atheletes
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athletes
from the same team or category are not being paid enough;
as a result
, those who are not paid enough have to face some difficulties related to their economy.
For example
, Football players from
first
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categories that are not getting paid as much as the ones that became famous have to afford from their own savings all the costs related to physiotherapy, nutritionists, personal trainers and sometimes
traveling
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to events; while famous Football players do not have to deal with
this
costs.
This
situation remarks how unfair the sports world is, and how important it will be to start recognising all professional
athletes
, so they can succeed in their
career
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.
On the other hand
, famous
musicians
earn lots of money doing shows, releasing new albums or
videoclips
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video clips
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and advertising their careers
in
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social media;
on the contrary
, the majority of
musicians
do not get paid and are not recognised for their performances, because a big part of the society believes that they do it as a hobby.
For instance
, not-famous
musicians
are not able to develop their career and generate a salary from it; usually, they do not have any support from music studios, and they cannot advertise their work. In
this
case, the government should change the laws regarding
to
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music and arts, and make sure that everybody has the same opportunities and wages. In conclusion, all
athletes
and
musicians
should be respected for what they do, because
at
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the end it is their job and that needs to be paid like every other career. I think that
the
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politicians should regulate their payments, so everybody can have an opportunity to
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succeed
suceed
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succeed
.
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