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More and more business as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face-to-face. What are the advantages and disadvantages to this.

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 of enterprises including
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 to interact both professionally and socially using
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. The following essay would discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of using
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 for interaction. On the
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 of the merits of
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 through
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 is that it is very convenient. Because of advances in
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 nowadays, a lot of
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 have gadgets that contain applications for websites and social media
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 as AliExpress and WhatsApp.
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 allows individuals to send information to and fro at any time without interruption to other activities of the day.
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, business messages as well as for individuals can send information without any delay, if the internet connection is very good.
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 would allow organizations to communicate vital information as well as interact with friends and families respectively. To exemplify AliExpress is a chine business website for buying and selling products from different countries and
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 WhatsApp for interacting and communicating with friends.
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 through the internet
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 increases the
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 of fraud. When interacting through social media
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 would not know each other intentions either good or bad.
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 lie about what they want to communicate. , another drawback is
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 of fraud. Because
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 buying products from companies cannot know the authenticity and quality of their goods.
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 would increase the crime
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 for businesses in the country.
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, the Nigeria police published an article that the
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 at which
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 got fraud increased to 30% in
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the years
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 2020 and 2021. In conclusion,
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 through
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 its own merits and demerit,
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 convenient and increase fraudulent in organization respectively.
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