Art classes should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

Opinions diverge widely when it comes to the importance of
art
in today's society. It is often believed that
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subjects should be mandatory in every school's curriculum. I personally, agree with the latter opinion for
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The principal reason why I agree with
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notion
,
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is because learning about
art
develops one's creativity and imagination. Painting, dancing or playing an instrument are all great tools to solidify a pupil's creative sense.
Moreover
, academic subjects and high school can be very stressful for students.
Thus
, it's important to imply activities where they can escape and relieve their anxiety.
For instance
, a recent study showed that college students who took an
art
class as
an
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academic credit, had fewer rates of clinical depression by the end of their cursus
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to the ones who never enrolled in an
art
course. Another reason why I agree with
this
opinion
,
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is because it can help find hidden talents. If a school gives all their students the opportunity to explore their aptitudes, eventually, it will contribute to
the
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Furthermore
,
art
fields like painting and music can offer great job
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. If a talented person learns early on how to sing and gains experience they can manage to make a good living out of their skill.
For example
, it is known that singers in our modern world live a very prosperous life. In conclusion, I believe that arts and
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should be a part of every educational system. Not only
it
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one's creative mind but it is an amazing tool to relax and take the edge off.
Besides
, it can
also
ensure fruitful careers.
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