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Education abroad is the key factor for becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our globalized world, studying abroad is becoming very popular in many developing
countries
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 at these times, even if it’s a high price journey for someone,
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however
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 it helps
people
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 to get a fulfilling job in their future life. It is mostly agreed that the flourishing of
people
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 somehow depends on their quality of
education
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.
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 thing
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, getting an
education
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 overseas encourages individuals to create a new tendency about their specialization. The greatest illustration which supports
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 claim is the thinking way of them
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 not humdrum in comparison with other
people
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 who have been living in the same country for their entire life. The perfect example for
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 argument would be many prominent human beings,
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, politicians, and important businesspeople. If we have looked at their backgrounds, we could find out that they have a good knowledge of their fields,
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, they have a great range of
education
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 journey.
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, some
people
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 claim that studying in other
countries
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 could be unaffordable and adaptation there should have been rough for some individuals most of the time. The main reason is some societies may have faced various problems.
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, the accommodation could be pricey, the cuisine is not as same as their
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, especially, the Asian country’s cuisine is not suitable for Europeans.
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, all these things are taken into consideration to have a good opportunity for an
education
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. To sum up, nowadays, being educated abroad is quite common in many societies even though it has upsides and drawbacks at times. From my point of view, studying abroad or having a diploma from other
countries
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 in the profession supports
people
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 to come to the best places of their life.
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