you recently received a letter from a friend asking foe advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter > say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. >explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. > suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.

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Dear Vishal, Greetings! hope you and your family are doing well. I got your letter and I found that you are having confusion about whether to go to college or to go for a job. So I would suggest that you should go for a job, which would be a better option for you, as you have already spent six years in college during your diploma and degree program, and I know how bored you were in the
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semester and because of that, I feel that you will not enjoy another year of college. Let me explain other aspects,
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few years and I know your family is going through financial problems, so it will be better to get a job and give a hand to your family during
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hard time.
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, I have seen lots of new vacancies for Electrical Engineers in big companies. You should apply for a troubleshooter, junior engineer, or related position. I hope
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Sincerely, Sahil Patel
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task response
Consider providing more specific reasons on why your friend might not enjoy college beyond just being bored. Mentioning aspects like coursework, environment, or other personal preferences could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph maintains a single focus to improve clarity. Try not to mix advice about jobs and reasons for not enjoying college within the same paragraph.
suitable writing tone
You have begun the letter with a warm and personalized greeting, which is suitable for the informal tone expected in a letter to a friend.
logical structure
The letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. It connects ideas smoothly, especially in addressing the main points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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