People should follow the local customs and traditions, when they come to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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local
customs
and traditions
are
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essential when residing in a new country. I completely agree with
this
opinion and
this
essay is going to discuss why it is important for new residents of a country to follow the
customs
and
tradition
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traditions

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of the
land
.
First
of all, I believe
practicing
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the
customs
and traditions of a new area as a stranger is beneficial as it fosters good
relationship
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relationships

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and acceptance from the inhabitants. Societies are usually noted for their rich tradition and if someone from a different
land
develops an interest in them they tend to love and see them as one of their own.
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instance
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if the Europeans visit Africa and wear the local and traditional regalia of the
land
, it is usually appreciated and they receive laudable remarks for
such
actions.
Secondly
, observance of the way of life of the group of people in which you find yourself helps one to settle in faster and mingle well with the indigenes
this
will result in being able to work with the inhabitants.
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example
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foreigners in every country are expected to adhere to the rules and laws of the
land
and
also
obtain required permits before they are allowed to work. In conclusion, I think it is very prudent for foreigners to make a conscious effort to practice
customs
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the customs

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and traditions of the
land
in which they are residing to help build a good relationship and make it easier to work with indigenes.
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