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People should follow the local customs and traditions, when they come to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often believed that
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 local
customs
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 and traditions
are
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 essential when residing in a new country. I completely agree with
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 opinion and
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 essay is going to discuss why it is important for new residents of a country to follow the
customs
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 and
tradition
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traditions
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 of the
land
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.
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 of all, I believe
practicing
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 the
customs
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 and traditions of a new area as a stranger is beneficial as it fosters good
relationship
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 and acceptance from the inhabitants. Societies are usually noted for their rich tradition and if someone from a different
land
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 develops an interest in them they tend to love and see them as one of their own.
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 if the Europeans visit Africa and wear the local and traditional regalia of the
land
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, it is usually appreciated and they receive laudable remarks for
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 actions.
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, observance of the way of life of the group of people in which you find yourself helps one to settle in faster and mingle well with the indigenes
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 will result in being able to work with the inhabitants.
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 foreigners in every country are expected to adhere to the rules and laws of the
land
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 and
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 obtain required permits before they are allowed to work. In conclusion, I think it is very prudent for foreigners to make a conscious effort to practice
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customs
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 and traditions of the
land
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 in which they are residing to help build a good relationship and make it easier to work with indigenes.
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