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Even though governments have worked hard to bring about improvements in the healthcare system, the overall standard of physical health in developed countries is decreasing. What are the potential reasons for this and what are some of the long-term effects?

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In most developed countries,
such
 as the United States and the UK, despite the governments offering advanced healthcare, there is a decline in the physical
health
 standards of its citizens. The main causes of
this
 situation are extended
work
hours
, the negligence of people resulting in early deaths and pressure on the
health
 department staff. A major reason for the decline in physical
health
 is because of the prolonged time people spend at
work
.
Although
 the nominal
work
hours
 are restricted to 40
hours
 per week, those employed in IT spend at least 50
hours
 weekly.
As a result
, the adults do not have time to prepare a healthy meal and consume outside food resulting in deteriorated
health
. Not taking care of
health
 in spite of having free time is another cause of
this
 problem. Though most of the population is educated, due to laziness they fail to pay attention to their well-being. In the long run, there will be huge pressure on the medical staff
such
 as doctors and nurses due to an increase in admissions for the treatment of diseases.
Hence
, the ones in these professions will have
work
-related stress.
Moreover
, there will be an increased death rate due to
illness causing
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 tension in the country. Owing to these impacts, the nations will experience an immense dip in the economy due to the over-consumption of resources. In conclusion, extended
work
hours
 and not paying attention to the
health
 qualities of the society increases the workload of the frontline staff of the country and causes an increase in the number of early age deaths.
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