The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
We are living in a world which becomes more unhealthy
everyday
due to several reasons and despite Replace the word
every day
of
the Change preposition
apply
fact
that most things have proven it self
as very useful they Correct your spelling
itself
as
have a major impact Correct word choice
apply
our
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on our
health
. Therefore
is it very likely that standard
of people's Correct article usage
the standard
health
decreases in the future.
I agree with that thought and Change the punctuation
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this
essay will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, Our health
will decrease in the future due the
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to the
fact
that everything will be digitalised and nobody actually have
to be active anymore in order to get things done. Change the verb form
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necessary to point out that we Add a verb
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wasIt
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humans
humen
are born to be physical and mentally active. That we do everything on or with the computer means we are doing everything without actually using our bodies and brains. We are in need to be active in order to be healthy. Taking Food delivery as an Correct your spelling
humans
examples
. Most people, especially young people do not go to the grocery store anymore, to enjoy the walk Correct the article-noun agreement
example
at
the fresh and Change preposition
in
and
pick Remove the redundancy
apply
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up
um
some nice Correct your spelling
up
and
fresh vegetables at the Correct word choice
apply
farmers
market. They Change noun form
farmer's
farmers'
on the contrary
just press the bottom on their phone and order their food while sitting on the couch watching some time consuming
reality TV show.
But not only thatAdd a hyphen
time-consuming
,
our Add the word(s)
but,
health
will also
decline due to a lack of social contact which is caused by the Digital Universe. Not or granted are 'Mental health
' issues nowadays already the most common deseases
amongst youngsters, not to think of how Correct your spelling
diseases
this
will continue. I am very much of the Opinion that, the
our Children will be less healthy, especially mentally, due to Remove the article
apply
fact
that they are much more under peer pressure and much less in actual contact with friends.
To conclude, I believe that our health
will lower in the future Correct your spelling
due
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to the Correct your spelling
due
fact
that our Add a hyphen
ever-evolving
ever evolving
digtialsim will replace basic human needs Add a hyphen
ever-evolving
such
as Correct your spelling
physical
phisical
, mental and social activity. I very much think that Correct your spelling
physical
this
is a serious problem and that the government, though they have plenty of other things to do such
as saving our planet, should act about it.Submitted by miriamjohannadan on
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