You have a friend who lives abroad. You have decided to apply for a course at one of the colleges in his city. Write to your friend explaining Tell them about the college and the course and why you want to do it. Ask for their help to find accommodation if you get admission to the course.

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Dear Anne, How are you? I hope you're fine. It's been so long since we've written to each other. I'

writing to inform you that I applied for a scholarship in one of the schools there in Canada and recently I received an email from the school that I got accepted. The school is just a little nearer to where you live and it's well-known for accepting international students all over the world for so many years. Anyway, the course I'

planning to study there is Horticulture Technician. Ever since I was a kid, it's been a hobby of mine to engross myself in landscaping and planting. I'

always interested in anything related to different kinds of plants. It was like a pastime for me back

then

, now I want to take it to a higher level of learning. You've been in Canada for years now, I'

sure you're already familiar with the place there. If you don't mind, I'

asking you favour in helping me find a place to stay while studying there. If possible, the accommodation is affordable and not far from the university, so I won't have to use the money for transportation. I would really appreciate it if you can give me a positive response at your earliest. Looking forward to meeting you soon. Best wishes, Angelica

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

221 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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