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Examine the arguments in favour and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

#arguments #favour #experiments #conclusion
It is often argued by some people that
animal's
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animal
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experiment
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experiments
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 should not be done while in other’s perspective,
it
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they
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 should be done.
This
 essay will discuss both
the
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issues and will try to give an excellent end. On the one hand,
animals
 are
the
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 integral part of
nature
.
Moreover
, without
animals
 our
nature
 is incomplete.
In addition
, they maintain the balance of
nature
.
Furthermore
, they have family,
emotions
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and emotions
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as
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like
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 humans have. So, none has the right to harm these innocent
animals
 for any
kind
 of
purposes
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purpose
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 like experiments.
For example
, China has created a milestone
to
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 the world by keeping their innocent
animals
 safe.
On the other hand
,
animal's
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animal
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experiment
 is barely needed for
the
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science
.
For instance
, without
animal's
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animal
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experiments
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experiment
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 any
kind
 of
practical
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practice
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 which should be done for the students of zoology and medical
science
 as well as in the lab can't
be happened
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happen
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.
As a result
, there will be remained a big lacking in
science
.
Moreover
, to save
the
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nature
 sometimes scientists have to
experiment
some
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with some
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animals
 due to save
the
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other
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others
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other
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animals
 or any
kind
 of life. Again,
science
do
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 their experiments on
animals
 especially when they have to discover a new wonder
such
 as any
kind
 of vaccine,cure etc. Though sometimes
animal's
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animal
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experiment
 seems to be very harsh, it has to happen for the betterment of other creatures. In conclusion, we have to keep in mind
about
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both
nature
 and
science
. Both
the
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things are
integral
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 part of civilization, we can't ignore anything. So,
animals
experiment
 should
be happened
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happen
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 in an
accounted
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account
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 way.
Submitted by Rubel Miah on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controversial
  • prevalence
  • scientific research
  • proponents
  • opponents
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • critical data
  • regulatory frameworks
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • moral objections
  • animal rights
  • species differences
  • unreliable results
  • alternatives to animal testing
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • volunteer microdosing
  • nuanced
  • complexity
  • weighing
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