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Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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 it is thought by some
people
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 that sharing more
data
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 in the fields of scientific
data
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, business and the academic
world
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 is beneficial;
However
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, others think that the
information
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 is too important to be shared freely.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and give my opinion later on. On the one hand, sharing more
information
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 about scientific research, business and the academic
world
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 would bring more advantages.
Firstly
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, it can help all
people
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 from around the
world
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, regardless of their background, whether rich or poor
people
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, to enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizons.
Secondly
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, in the modern
world
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, especially with the COVID-19 situation, thank to sharing the free
data
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 from
people
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 from all nations enables us to raise awareness about the virus as well as medicine, or technology for treatment. So it is very important to report the diseases in a minute and inform all
people
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 about the consequences that they will be faced.
On the other hand
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, it is sometimes believed that those kinds of
information
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 are too valuable to be shared and should not be free for they take years to gather.
For instance
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, there are some
people
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 who spend several years collecting
data
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 and the cost is significant. I think
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 valuable
information
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 should not be free to share. Another reason is that
people
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 will not know the purpose of sharing
information
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 which is not filtered.
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, if the
information
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 is shared without verification, it would make a condition for terrorists and they make use of it to threaten the
world
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.
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, there is still some classified
information
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 that should not be shared with the public. In conclusion, it is beneficial to share as much
information
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 in certain fields freely. I completely believe that we should consider some
information
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 is too valuable for someone and it is may harmful to be shared.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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