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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. write an email to your friend. In your email -recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn -explain how your friend could learn this sport -suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear Julie, How have you been? I'm glad to know that you have recently moved to my town. Hope you are enjoying
this
 place. I saw your message that you are looking to learn a new sports activity. In our town, there is a Cassie Cambell sports club which has a dedicated area for different sports activities
such
 as cricket, badminton and many more. I would recommend you to learn badminton and
this
 will not only include physical involvement but you play in a team. I would suggest you
this
 place to learn a new sport as they have well-experienced coaches and
also
 they are
billingual
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bilingual
. I know you would be much more comfortable
in
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speaking English than Hindi and will be easier for you to
communciate
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communicate
. I told you when we spoke
last
 time, that I'm taking swimming classes and my classes are getting
finish
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 next week. I am
also
 willing to learn a new sport
from
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for
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long
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a long
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 time and I can accompany you from next week onwards if you are ok
to wait
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 for a week. I would love to learn and play with you. We will
also
 get
sometime
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 to spend together. Let me know your thoughts, see you soon! Yours lovingly, Tanya Luthra
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Coherence and Cohesion
A logical structure should guide the reader through the content smoothly, using clear paragraphs and transitions. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas between paragraphs connect in a logical way.
Coherence and Cohesion
It's important to have both an introduction and conclusion to frame the content of your letter. Introduce the purpose of your email at the start and end with a clear conclusion or summary.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support your main points with relevant details and examples. This helps to flesh out your ideas, making them more persuasive and engaging to the reader.
Task Achievement
Ensure that the response is fully addressing all parts of the task. Each bullet point should be clearly covered in your letter, providing a complete answer to each aspect of the prompt.
Task Achievement
Ideas should be expressed clearly and comprehensively. Aim to develop your points and make your writing easy to understand, avoiding ambiguity or confusion.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your recommendations and explanations. This could include mentioning specific classes, times, costs, or the exact benefits to be gained from following your advice.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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