Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no doubt that these days, technology and modernity

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made an

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transformation across the globe. Most

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Sophisticated

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devices have the allowance to observe

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activity and private information,

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feature leads to positive consequences.

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it

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caused a plethora of demerits. In

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essay I am going to discuss both perspectives, eventually, I will draw my own conclusion. On the one hand, in terms of the benefits of

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people through the network.

Firstly

, Supervising help in finding escaped dangerous criminals.

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or burglary

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.

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, people who used

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should be observed to help them to find their device in case they lost it. As a shining example,

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month I lost my I phone and I found it

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a mobile app called find your phone. On the other flip of the coin, a negative side of

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feature has shown. Lack of privacy like location or financial information could be exposed to others or

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.

Unfortunately

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this

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a significant rising in burglary and embezzlement rates.

For instance

, a recent study

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published by king Saud University estimated that individuals who exposed their own data on social media platforms like Facebook and

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have a high risk of getting larceny. In conclusion,

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monitoring and detecting peoples' data could be useful in

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numerous situations.

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, a plethora of disadvantages

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been observed among communities.

Therefore

, I strongly believe privacy lacking is more dangerous and outweigh the benefits. Government must ensure steps are taken to prevent

this

action from deteriorating our future.