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Many people these days have computer, laptop and telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantage or disadvantage?

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Nowadays technology has a great impact on our
life
. Technology has made our daily
life
 easy by letting us use some of the major products. The products like computers, laptops and telephone are proved beneficial for our day-to-day
life
. Due to the outbreak of ,COVID-19 all the offices and workplaces are shut down. Due to
this
 on the other ,
hand
 employees started working from
home
.
Besides
, children
also
 started their studies at
home
. There are many pros and cons to
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, I will start with the advantages. In
this
 fast-forward ,
life
 people are so busy that they do not have
time
 for their parents and family. So by working from
home
 they can spend their precious
time
 with their family. Either they can play games with their kids or have some quality talk with their partner. On the other ,
hand
 children
also
 begin their studies at their
home
. Due to ,
this
 their parents are tension free of their kids. Because nowadays there are many cases of kidnapping, robbery and many more. Working from
home
 is
also
 beneficial in the sense of learning new things. Like we can learn cooking, cleaning the house and many more. On the other ,
hand
 there are some disadvantages of working from
home
.
Firstly
, people spend more
time
 using their laptops, computers and telephones. By spending more
time
 on electronic gadgets they can suffer from stress, headache, fever, body pain and many more. For ,children it is harmful to their eyes. They will either play games on the computer or chat with their friends on the telephone. They will not go outside to play outdoor games with their friends So in conclusion, it is proved that working from
home
 has many advantages but on the other ,
hand
 it has bad effects on our daily
life
.
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