Some people believe that sports competition are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore youth should be banned from participating in sports competition. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that
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competition causes stress in the youth
thus
they must not be allowed to take
part
in
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matches. In my opinion, there are some
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reasons
resons
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reasons
why I disagree with
this
idea. Namely, it is
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way to release
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excitement
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excitement
positively, young people need
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of competition.
However
,some individuals have
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point
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of view that will be discussed
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following essay. Every year many
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events are
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all over the world. I believe it has some benefits for
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adolescents
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adolescents
.
Initially
, they are full of energy and need a suitable place for
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it and
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matches because of
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benefits
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benefits
that have for their bodies and
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is a good place , if younger people do not release their energies in these types of physical activities , they would take
part
in some illegal works .
Additionally
,
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amount
of competition is
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useful
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useful
for the youth
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because
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because
it makes them motivated to try harder for their goals .
for instance
when a young individual
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the
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socer
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match , they become
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to take
part
in some physical activities .
On the other hand
, it is believed that these kinds of matches have some drawbacks especially for teenagers
firstly
, because the
amount
of excitement in
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matches is high
thus
has bad effects
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their mind ,
for example
, some
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soccer
lovers because of
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amount
of
estress
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stress
in plays hurt
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themself
himself
or destroy public properties .
secondly
, these competitions usually are addictive and teenagers are likely to spend too much time on them . In conclusion, the benefits of
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matches are more than their drawbacks if individuals can
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control
controll
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control
the
amount
of taking
part
in them .
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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