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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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 have been advancing at an accelerated rate in a multitude of arenas and it has been exerting
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 influence on the way we travel. Some
people
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 predict that the only
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 inside
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 will be passengers in the future. I personally think the advantages far outweigh
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Driverless
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vehicles
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 trend facilitates human daily life in most scenarios. For
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 who are regarded as
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 roles,
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 the need for driving cars, buses and trucks helps them save a large amount of time. During the
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 process, they can do some valuable things, including enjoying family time, finishing urgent tasks, learning new skills and so on, rather than tedious long-hour driving. For
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 who lack
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 to drive,
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older
 adults and younger teenagers,
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vehicles
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 provide them with a more convenient life. Utilizing
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 cars properly, they will excel at routine tasks and explore the world without the help of others. At the same time, the application of
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 technology
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 helps resolve some enduring
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 issues.
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 cars, buses and trucks play an important role in reducing the probability of road accidents. A large proportion of
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 accidents result from human error.
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, even the smallest amount of alcohol in the blood can impair a person’s driving ability, which may cause bodily harm or dearth. Compared to emotional human
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,
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artificial intelligence which is designed to guide
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vehicles
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 is prone to be rational and logical. The driving behaviour of
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artificial intelligence is based on
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 and calculation of a huge amount of information;
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, it is reliable and
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 reduce
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 accidents.
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traffic
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-accident rate contributes to less
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 congestion. Robots
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 help passengers arrive
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 destinations safe and sound. It may be reasonable to make some exceptions and we need to acknowledge the fact that
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driverless
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 trend brings some negative changes as well.
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, taxi
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, bus
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 and truck
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 will lose their work after the prevalence of
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vehicles
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.
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, the thriving
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 industry will create a growing number of positions for employees. In conclusion, while I recognise the possible disadvantages of
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 trend, I consider it to be a positive development overall.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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