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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with opinion?

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There is a challenging topic among people that many opine that language proficiency is the only way to familiarize with a cultural background in a local country ,
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 idea because verbal skill is a very important role in getting information from others ,alongside, speaking fluency in an aboriginal language will bring more intimacy among individuals ,so , I am going to bring some piece of evidence to confirm
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 the most important part of belief and historical memory of human in a specific region , so , without an effective relationship with citizens ,anybody cannot reach a deep knowledge of new society ,
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 to, accent and pronunciation is another column of the meaningful relationship between foreign and local people,in my experience, when I was as a medical doctor in a village ,I have found if I could speak in their accent ,they were more like me ,so ,their grand people have tried to talk about historical stories that these were me more aware of their dreams and values . In another word, civilization has been constructed based on the shoulders of human verbal skills,
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 ,many ancient pieces of evidence have been discovered by scientists in the old mountain that approved when humans could enormously progress that they have been started to communicate with others by creating a speech.
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 , better speaking skills can be able close individuals together ,because communication is organized by the native language and cultural knowledge has been extracted from stories and effective communication through dialogue with others, so , I completely agree with
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 statement that speaking is a powerful method to percept a culture in a community.
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