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Band 7

You ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago, but you have received nothing. Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. Say when and how you ordered the cheque book. Ask how much longer you will have to wait and ask the manager what action he will take over this matter.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the poor service which I have received after placing the new
chequebook
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 order request. Almost two weeks back, I placed an advance order for a new
chequebook
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 at your bank as I was about to consume my current
chequebook
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. I
also
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 raised
this
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 request through your online application form and got the confirmation number once the request
got
Verb problem
was

There may be a verb use issue here.

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 submitted successfully. Since I was aware of my situation and my business nature, where most of the transactions are done through cheques only, I applied for a new
chequebook
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 well in advance.
However
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, I did not receive anything nor any intimation from the bank officials about
this
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 delay.
Due to
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 not having
this
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 important document, I have already started losing my contracts.
Therefore
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, please let me know
that
Correct word choice
apply

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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when can I get my newly applied
chequebook
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
Hence
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, I would like to complain in the strongest terms about the unsatisfactory service that I received from your bank officials. I would appreciate it if you could give your immediate attention to
this
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 matter, and I would be grateful to know what actions you will be planning to take. I look forward to receiving your explanation. Your’s
faithfully
Replace the adverb
faithful

It appears that the adverb faithfully should be an adjective. Consider replacing it.

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, Arsh

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Work on varying sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
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Ensure consistency in addressing the recipient, such as using 'Sir/Madam' or a specific title/name.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the issue and provided relevant details.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite yet firm tone, appropriate for a formal complaint.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are logically structured and linked, aiding comprehension.
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