It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for both individual and society. Do you agree or disagree? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some
people
say that
people
should get married at the age of under 30. As they say,
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good for both society and
people
themselves. In
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I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
To begin
with, marriage is not just a
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with signatures, but
also
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a big responsibility. Many families are breaking up simply because they do not tolerate each other 's character.
As a result
, lots of children have to live in orphanages or live in a single-parent
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.
This
can affect their mental health and there may be a lack of paternal care, which can have a bad influence on the future life of the
child
. So
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very important to meet someone you want to live with for the rest of your life.
On the other hand
, getting married after 30 may lead to the birth of a
child
with defects because of which a
child
will suffer as well as his parents. They need to spend a lot of time, money and attention on
this
. In most cases, older
people
have enough money and a place to live, but
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do not have the strength to take care of their children. To conclude, I would point
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where and when to get married depends on a person himself. Being married at the age of 25 or 50 doesn't make
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, the most important thing is to be able to provide a good childhood for your
child
.
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