A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as amain sourse of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be source of problems if it is not managed correctly.

Several governments suppose to travel industry to increase salaries. On
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side perhaps to provoke illegal issues. To start with growth with economic activities.
Tourism
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industry has become one of
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economic
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.
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, it’s contributing around ten per cent of global GDP and seven per cent of the world exports.
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of infrastructure,
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allows visitors to enjoy views of massive
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and unique
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.
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other contrary
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, tourism has plenty of drawbacks
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island
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pollution,
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erosion, and deforestation. Country
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economical
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unstable without visitors.
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, some governments lost income due to
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period. As a consequence,
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industry can create
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economy,
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infrastructure.
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effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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