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Band 6

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree ?

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this
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 day and age, there is a controversial idea heating a debate over the fact that it is better to use
money
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 in enhanced ways and motorways than on public means of
transport
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. In my opinion, I consider myself
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an objector
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this
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 idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, the
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way
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 may not be possible in some metropolitans where the investment in
transport
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systems
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 is extremely significant. The only
way
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 to revamp the quality of these ways is to expand its width but in those
cities
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 the land is not enough for the expansion.
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, to have an extension on the
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, it needs to demolish old amenities or houses, which often take a lot of time to complete.
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, to construct a highway in VietNam will take nearly a decade to destroy the old conveniences and nearly 5 years to build up
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 project.
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, it is irrefutable to note that spending
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 on roads and motorways is not an effective
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. While the barrier of the former
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 is widely acknowledged, the latter
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seems to be more suitable. It is undeniable to see that public
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systems
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 are regularly above or underground the roads and when under construction, it just accounts for the small space
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 these roads.
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, to construct a subway above the
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, they just need to put barriers in the middle of the
road
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 and not affect two sides of the
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.
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, using
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 in public
transport
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systems
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 is more possible. In conclusion, it is necessary to spend
money
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 on the infrastructure of
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systems
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, since it should prioritize public ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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