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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree ?

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In
this
 day and age, there is a controversial idea heating a debate over the fact that it is better to use
money
 in enhanced ways and motorways than on public means of
transport
. In my opinion, I consider myself
as
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an objector
with
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this
 idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, the
first
way
 may not be possible in some metropolitans where the investment in
transport
systems
 is extremely significant. The only
way
 to revamp the quality of these ways is to expand its width but in those
cities
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 the land is not enough for the expansion.
Additionally
, to have an extension on the
road
, it needs to demolish old amenities or houses, which often take a lot of time to complete.
For example
, to construct a highway in VietNam will take nearly a decade to destroy the old conveniences and nearly 5 years to build up
this
 project.
Hence
, it is irrefutable to note that spending
money
 on roads and motorways is not an effective
way
. While the barrier of the former
way
 is widely acknowledged, the latter
one
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seems to be more suitable. It is undeniable to see that public
transport
systems
 are regularly above or underground the roads and when under construction, it just accounts for the small space
in
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 these roads.
For instance
, to construct a subway above the
road
, they just need to put barriers in the middle of the
road
 and not affect two sides of the
road
.
Therefore
, using
money
 in public
transport
systems
 is more possible. In conclusion, it is necessary to spend
money
 on the infrastructure of
transport
systems
, since it should prioritize public ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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