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Today more people are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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The majority of
people
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 decided to travel in many eras. They believed that travelling is the way for
ranout
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ran out
 of their problems. So, there are many advantages and
difference
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 between travelling in the past and now. For stater,
in
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many decades ago,
people
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 travelled by some animals like horses, and camels. So, the trips usually needed more time, they might be long several days for
trip
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the trip
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.
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,
people
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transferred
transfered
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transferred
 goods to
got
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 other
dominstrations
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demonstrations
.
On the other hand
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,
nowdays
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nowadays
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, travelling is for fun and relaxation.
In
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 instance, many employees worked hard all the days of
week
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the week
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 and needed some time to refresh their brain and got
energy
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the energy
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 to continue their
occuption
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occupation
.
Secondly
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, some generations transfer more information about their trip to the children. They travelled to other countries or cities to
saw
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 various cultures, traditional
bazzars
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bazaars
 ,and historical buildings.
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, They have tried to
commomuration
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commemoration
 identify of countries. So, much more
people
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 would like to journey at the weekend. On the other way, travelling
have
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 more benefits for
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 and local
persons
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people
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. Travellers purchased some gifts to show the culture of
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this
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the
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 place where they travelled.
In addition
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, buying something causes
development
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the development
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 of the
economic
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 of countries by transfer of money.
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, a foreign person bought
carpet
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a carpet
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 which was the symbolic of art and handicrafts of Iran. He paid money to show the skills and talents of Iranian
people
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 in the art to other places.
To
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
,
people
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 gave more information when they visited other places. They enjoy the period
of
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apply
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trip
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the trip
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 by sightseeing
amazing
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with amazing
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 nature and breathing fresh air.
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, They have helped out the
growthing
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growing
growth
 of
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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