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In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages

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There has been a tendency for consuming
food
products
 from foreign areas and nations compared to the local ones. I deem that
this
 trend brings more benefits than pitfalls to our lives. On the one hand, it is understandable why some are against the consumption of foreign
food
products
. They argue that
this
 may lead to an increase in occupational loss. As customers tend to purchase green
products
 that originate from other areas, local ones will make less to no profit, which means low income for farmers, and
this
 forces them to find another job to pay for their living.
However
,
this
 notion can be solved by adequate exporting policies from the governments. By efficiently exporting high-quality local farming fruits and vegetables to other cities that are in need, both the states and individuals can earn higher profits.
On the other hand
, there are many merits associated with the increasing consumption of foreign
food
.
Firstly
, most imported foods are healthy and nutritious.
For example
, durian, one of the most favourite fruits among Asians, is only growable in South East Asia countries where the weather is hot and humid, and it is exported to many nations like Australia or America because of its flavours and nutrition. Another advantage is the competitive market. As more
food
 is imported to the country, it will motivate the local business and individuals to produce better
food
 to compete against the foreign ones, which ultimately benefits the customers. In conclusion, with the aforementioned, I believe that purchasing
food
products
 from foreign areas is a beneficial trend for the customer.
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