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Loneliness is an increasing problem in many societies, especially among elderly. Why is this? How might it be remedied?

#loneliness #societies
It is true that living in an isolated stage is rising day by day and
this
 is mainly happening with old
people
 due for many reasons. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss some of the related causes of
this
issue
 and suggest some solutions to deal with
this
 kind of problem. One of the main reasons for the growing loneliness amongst many mature
people
 because they tend to be abandoned by their
families
.
This
 has become obvious that children leave their
parents
 when they get older, and
this
 causes isolating moments for elderly
people
.
For example
, a recent report in The London press shows that, out of five
families
 in London, three
families
 left their
parents
 alone.
As a result
, these mature
people
 end up living lonely life for the rest of their life due to ignorance by their own
families
. In order to tackle
this
issue
, the governments should introduce a law which states that children are not allowed to leave their
parents
 alone when they grow older.
This
 could be effective if the family understand their obligation towards their old relatives.
For instance
, the government of London has enforced a rule mentioned that the children's responsibility to take after their
parents
 and they are not permitted to send their
parents
 or old relatives to the old age home or abandoned to live on their own unless any special circumstances.
Thus
, the number of old
people
 living in the old age house has been reduced and family started to live together. In conclusion,
although
 loneliness is a growing
issue
 amongst many aged
people
 due to their family ignorance, there are certain measures that can be taken to deal with
this
issue
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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