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many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can be suggested?

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Many criminals continue doing criminal
activities
 just after release from jail.
Although
this
 phenomenon is attributed to several causative factors, effective policies can be adopted to remedy the situation. There are several
reasons
 for offenders to commit
crimes
 again.
Firstly
, one of the main
reasons
 is unemployment. As people are not willing to employ or work with individuals with a criminal background, those who are released from prison do not have many job opportunities. Being unemployed or working with low salaries makes
such
 people commit
crimes
 to make a living. To tackle
this
 problem, governments can not only teach prisoners some skills to help them find
a proper jobs
Correct the article-noun agreement
a proper job
proper jobs
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. But
also
 can provide them
some
Add the preposition
with some
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 employment chances related to skills they have learned in jail.
Secondly
, being prisoned can not be a deterrent while the main
reasons
 for committing a crime
such
 as poverty, unemployment, and mental problems remain unchanged.
As a result
 of
this
 constant difficult situation, those released from prison tend to continue doing criminal
activities
. As a solution, societies should find the conditions that result in committing
crimes
 through a period of consultation done by experts for offenders.
Then
 they are able to solve the main
reasons
 for criminal
activities
 in society. To conclude, spending a period in jail can not prevent prisoners from committing
crimes
 because of many
reasons
such
 as society’s situation and unemployment. To tackle
this
 statement, societies and governments should provide a condition in which the main
reasons
 for criminal
activities
 are solved and some job opportunities are created for people with criminal backgrounds
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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