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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, the
government
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 are spending so much
money
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 on research. Some
people
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 think the
government
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 is wasting
money
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 and should spend
money
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 finding the
problems
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 of the public. I completely agree with that point which is the
government
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 are wasting
money
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 and these reasons will be discussed in the below paragraph.
To begin
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 with, the
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 is spending
money
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 on useless
activities
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 like giving
money
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 to the
people
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 without any hard work
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 and spending
money
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 on their own party
activities
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 etc.
For example
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, take my village, they are many
people
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 doing farming. If we provide subsidies to the farmers, it will be useful to do well farming but the
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 is not interested
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 to farmers. So, the
government
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 should enquire about the
people
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's
problems
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, like what type of
problems
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 really facing,
then
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 the
government
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 should spend
money
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 for the public.
In addition
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, the
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 failed many times support to the public.
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, recently one
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 happened in my district that was flooded. In that flood
situation
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, so many
people
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 lost homes and some
people
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 suffered without food but the
government
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 did not support anything
people
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 in that
situation
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. At the same time, governments are spending
money
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 on party
activities
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, these are some reasons that show the
government
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 wasting
money
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. If the
government
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 spend
money
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 on the
people
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 in the flood
situation
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,
that is
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 useful to overcome the
situation
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. In conclusion, I believe the
government
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 is wasting
money
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 to spend other unnecessary
activities
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. So, the
government
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 should understand the public
problems
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, and
then
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 spend
money
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 to solve the
problems
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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