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Most of the world's problems are caused by overpoplulation. Do you agree or disagree?

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Ever since civilization began, the
size
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 of human lives and settlements has widened over years around the world. With the increase in
population
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size
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,
people
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 complain that society become problematic and chaotic to live in and I believe it is not less than agreeable.
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 is because, When more human lives exist, the world becomes too competitive and hard to survive as the share of space and
resources
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 becomes minimal. Thereby in order to survive
people
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's practices are fights, robbery, scams, unfaithful relations, forgery, etc in order to make their livelihood.
For example
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country
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 like India where it consists the
second
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 largest
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 in the world, due to its huge
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, many
people
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 were left unnoticed by covid infection and
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 couldn't get medical aid which resulted in many death. Whereas though Bhutan is a less populated
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, all the individuals residing in any nook and corner of the
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 received intense care and attention from not only the government but
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 from the highest authority, the King of the
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.
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, overpopulation leads to the inclination of the unemployment rate, declination of
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, and
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 increases the rate of poverty in a
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.
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, having less
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 can
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 repercurred in the loss of human capital in a
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.
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, with less number of
people
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 in the
country
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, it is actually risking the independence of the
country
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 as the
country
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 required human
resources
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 to fight and protect the
country
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 from another
country
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. Like
country
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 Maldives, though the
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 of the
country
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 is smaller than Tibet, their human
resources
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 are more powerful than Tibet and
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 remind independent.
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, having said that, in a nutshell, One can find that the larger the
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 of the
population
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, the more social issues and challenges in lives. Life gets sophisticated and competitive and gets dirtier in society.

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