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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #internet #communities
We can't live without the
internet
.
People
use
 it for various reasons, one of the primary purposes is to keep in touch with
people
 and society, yet it
also
 has the concern of isolating
people
. The
internet
 impact
people
 differently depending on how you
use
 it. The
Internet
 has given us plenty of benefits,
such
 as bringing
people
 closer. Bring
people
 around the world. Whether it’s strangers or your family and friends, with the
internet
, you can share your
life
 and have conversations. It makes keeping up with your loved ones so much easier without being too far from each other or too busy to meet up. You can connect with
people
 anywhere and anytime. I used to study abroad alone. The
internet
 was the only way I could stay in touch with my family by phone calls, social media, and texts.
People
also
use
 the
internet
 to seek help from others. The
internet
 definitely brings
people
 closer. While the
internet
 gives us benefits, some think it makes
people
 and the community more isolated. Since by using the
Internet
, we can text the
people
 we want to talk to or even
use
 facetime to see each other without meeting in person,
people
 are relying on the
internet
 more and more.
People
 are willing to
use
 the
internet
 more than staying connected in reality. Some studies show that
people
 who spend more time on the
internet
 spend less time communicating in person, which leads to
people
 and the community becoming more isolated. Though there are concerns that the
internet
 isolates
people
, the
internet
 doesn't necessarily cause it.
People
 who
use
 the
internet
 correctly can feel closer by using it.
People
 should
use
 the
internet
 to connect with
people
 but still keep in touch in real
life
. It would help if you always remembered that the
internet
 is not the real world. To avoid overusing the
internet
, you can limit your
use
 time and interact with
people
 in reality more. Have your
internet
life
 and real-
life
 balanced. The
internet
 can keep you closer to
people
 and the community and isolate your social
life
. The
internet
 has pros and cons but it all depends on how you
use
 it. Teenagers are the biggest group
that is
 affected by the
internet
. Parents should teach their children the correct way to
use
 the
internet
 once they have access to it. Teens may be more likely not to feel isolated from using the
internet
.
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