In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In many places, offspring are involved in various types of employment. Some would say that
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is utterly wrong, while others are of the opinion that
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is fine because it prepares them for the workforce. I agree with the latter point and will show that, despite some concerns about its effect on education, working at a young age can enhance a person’s character. It is often argued that working before the age of eighteen is wrong because it impacts how successful offspring are in their studies.
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is because they are under increasing pressure to perform academically, and a job will force them to reduce the time they have to study.
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, a UK offspring’s charity found that offspring who worked part-time were less likely to achieve higher grades than those who did not.
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, I believe the lessons offspring can learn from working are invaluable. Getting a part-time job contributes to offspring’s character development. It teaches them the value of hard work and exposes them to the real world, where they learn things they would never learn in the classroom.
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result in them working harder and being more disciplined at school.
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, a teenager working in a restaurant for a few hours at the weekend can learn how to interact with the general public without their academic performance isively affected. For
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reason, I think that concerns about work’s negative effects on education are unfounded. In conclusion, despite fears that offspring will neglect their studies if they are required to work, I argue that a little work experience at a young age can build character.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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