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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

#title #students #study #colleges #universities #country
Although
 some
countries
 have well-known universities, there are many
countries
 with poor educational facilities. Due to that, more students prefer to move to another country in order to complete their studies.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad and why
advantages
Correct article usage
the advantages
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
First
, learning advanced knowledge and experience. Take China as an example.
Although
 our scientific technology has improved a lot;
however
, there is still a huge gap between China and the developed
countries
 in terms of technological level. At
this
 point, studying abroad gives students an opportunity to continue their studies and learn new knowledge.
As a result
, students can use the knowledge that they learned from other
countries
 to improve their own
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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