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Demand of food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

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Food is necessary to survive because the public cannot live without bread. As the population increases, requirements
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 rise. most societies rely on other countries to complete the need for meals. There are various reasons for increasing demand which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the predominant reason is that increasing population may lead to rising consumption as well as the requirement for food. Global meal scarcity becoming a boom all over the world. Rice , Wheat etcetera are not compatible with all weather to grow in all regions of the world, unwantedly, many regions are forcibly relying on others. Recently nations facing a scarcity of onion and by
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 the price of a commodity touched the sky and individuals are unable to it purchase. So it demands the community's needs in their daily life. According to the Indian report 2019, 23.4% of farming land is occupied by industries. As a consequence, 63% of farm workers are intended to do some other jobs.
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, the main objective of exporting and importing resources to the neighbourhood
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 is because of excesses or shortages in production. In my opinion, the Overseas community should look over solutions and research why people demanding, how to overcome
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 problem and what should be the best way to get rid of
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. As long as exporting cooking resources to other regions culminating in one country's economy is obsolete. So, I would like to suggest administrative tend to keep things which crucially demand around people and if it is excessive after the crowd's contentment,
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 the government may transport those resources and bring up the economy-level higher would be better.
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